1st exterior 2 storey residential (day and night)

first try ko in exterior using sketchup and podium. rush lang po ito since floor plan at elevation lang binigay sakin at gusto agad makita ng client ang magiging itsura ng bahay.






sadyang hindi ko na nilagyan ng ilaw sa loob ng bahay kundi sa labas lang. wala na ring background added... just the structure itself. beginner pa lang ako in using podium.

comments and suggestions very much welcome!

thanks!

awww..... 51 views 0 comment, hehehe...

chrispph wrote:awww..... 51 views 0 comment, hehehe...

browse mo na lang yung ibang post dito sir, andun din kasi sagot at possible comments sa render niyo sir. good luck.

O sige...
On your dayscene;
---align your verticals, unwritten rule po yan sa Arkiviz...
---chamfer that driveway; pwede naman siyang ganyan pero diba mas suave kung gradual ang inclination...
---potted plants? Pwede... Pero I'd plant them in fact I'd put a whole lot of plants around my house to soften the view. But since you like em potted, you could have scaled-rotated para di magmukhang naka linyang sundalo ang greens natin...
---Plywood main entry door? Yet your second floor balcony door is aluminum sliding?...
---Does Podium have displacement? Cause I'm gonna call out your bricks & grass if it does..
---Use a better car... Better in terms of quality, not supercar status better...

On your nightscene;
---Those eave lights look really white hot, unnantural, yet they give scant illumination, almost as if they're actually eating up the illumination from outside...
---What's the weird stuff on the main plywood door?...
---Bakit sinadya mong hindi lagyan ng ilaw sa loob? At BG na rin?... Couldn't you have?...
---Postlamps have IES but no light source within...

Overall; look for better maps, work on the window glass, do complete your scenes else you come off as tamad, kaya siguro tinamad na din magcomment ang iba; show the effort & get the effort...
---When you post, never use your being a "beginner" as an excuse for mediocre work; you will always be judged for what you post, guru or newbie alike...

Satisfied?...

should i say more? comments have been said...incorporate those and let us see if you'll gain more comments than viewing!!!

additional comments:
*ridge roll and use 3d roof or displacement
*glass shader,walang reflection and refraction(1st image)
*masyado yatang malaki ang railing, ano po diameter nyan?
*road map
*carport masikip

cloud20 wrote:O sige...
On your dayscene;
---align your verticals, unwritten rule po yan sa Arkiviz...
---chamfer that driveway; pwede naman siyang ganyan pero diba mas suave kung gradual ang inclination...
---potted plants? Pwede... Pero I'd plant them in fact I'd put a whole lot of plants around my house to soften the view. But since you like em potted, you could have scaled-rotated para di magmukhang naka linyang sundalo ang greens natin...
---Plywood main entry door? Yet your second floor balcony door is aluminum sliding?...
---Does Podium have displacement? Cause I'm gonna call out your bricks & grass if it does..
---Use a better car... Better in terms of quality, not supercar status better...

On your nightscene;
---Those eave lights look really white hot, unnantural, yet they give scant illumination, almost as if they're actually eating up the illumination from outside...
---What's the weird stuff on the main plywood door?...
---Bakit sinadya mong hindi lagyan ng ilaw sa loob? At BG na rin?... Couldn't you have?...
---Postlamps have IES but no light source within...

Overall; look for better maps, work on the window glass, do complete your scenes else you come off as tamad, kaya siguro tinamad na din magcomment ang iba; show the effort & get the effort...
---When you post, never use your being a "beginner" as an excuse for mediocre work; you will always be judged for what you post, guru or newbie alike...

Satisfied?...

thanks a lot for the comments cloud20.

- hindi naman plywood, actually panel door na wood and finish nya at may design depth ng half inch around the corner pero hindi napansin yung depth.
- hindi po yan supercar... actually late model pa nga... 2003 honda accord model sya from 3d warehouse, hehehe
- yung "weird stuff" ay reflection from the porch at potted plants below.

thanks a lot cloud20 for taking the time! much appreciated!

phranq wrote:additional comments:
*ridge roll and use 3d roof or displacement
*glass shader,walang reflection and refraction(1st image)
*masyado yatang malaki ang railing, ano po diameter nyan?
*road map
*carport masikip

- noted ridge roll and glass shader
- diameter is .06M
- carport as stated on the given floor plan is 2.5 x 4.5M

thanks a lot sa comments and suggestions phranq! very much appreciated!

-yung brick parang pinagpatongpatong na loafbread (joke lang sir) paliitin mo scale ng brick para makita yung outline nya..
-yung BG mo maliwanag masyado lagay ka ng darker color na blue.
-yung terrace mo walang beams parang slab lang lagyan mo ng beam para sa massing at magmukhang real design.
-yung carport mo maliit sagad masyado hindi makakapasok tao dun sa main entry.. minimum carport size 5m X 2.4m nasa building code yan.
-yung setback ng building sa road kapag front atleast minimum of 3 meters.
-add flora, at walng sanga yung plants mo..(hehe)
-sa night scene mo , pag tanggalin mo yung lights hindi magmukhang night scene, baka gloomy lang yung sky ambient in real life
-so far mas maganda to sa mga practices ko hehe
mas maganda kung observe mo yung mga gawa nila dito , example, kung paano yung ground nila, paano yung background ng scene nila, at ano yung mga coments ng mga masters sa ibang gawa ng ating members at matutunan mo na ah ganun pla yun, hehe konti na lng

thanks a lot northhigh! noted lahat ng comments mo at ng ibang members.

maraming salamat sa words of encouragement... much appreciated!

What I actually meant was okay naman yung car type na nilagay mo, just find one with much better quality & to not go overboard with choosing a replacement by picking a lambo or some such...

Nice move, calling out for comments...
I've got my eye on you now...